Despair

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Despair

Postby muckyduck » Tue Sep 27, 2011 10:11 pm

Swirling black clouds surround my head
No emotions, thoughts are dead
Deep in the abyss, my body lies
No struggling now, just close my eyes

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Re: Despair

Postby GrimDad » Wed Sep 28, 2011 2:25 pm

:roll:

Hi muckyduck, I do like your brief 'Despair'.
It strikes me that it could be sung, as a good intro to a song like 'Black Is Black' maybe.

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Re: Despair

Postby muckyduck » Thu Sep 29, 2011 12:38 am

we could be on to something ill write the words you write the music ha maybe this is how elton and bernie started
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Re: Despair

Postby enigma » Tue Jun 19, 2012 3:37 am

interesting to not that if the title 'despair' was changed or removed, this could also be a short piece about a sense of oneness and passive serenity with the universe. like it in the sense you ave put it across also though.
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