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A fishing poem

PostPosted: Wed Sep 07, 2005 3:42 am
by K
At twilight pondandsky ensconced.
Eliciting refracted light above and
beyond the willows’ wilting bones;
casting spindly ghoul shadows upon

the early morning swells. Thick-globed
lips gulp the evil, succour bread-flake
to ghostly swirls; incite rolling of sleeves,
shading of eyes toward the moonlikesun.

Such synergy is enough, and we sleep
like drunken babies on a dewy shore.

PostPosted: Tue Sep 20, 2005 11:48 am
by GrimDad
Hi K,

I do like your poems, and doing some searches on Google I notice that some of your phrases do find your poems on this forum. Eg a search on your sheet-squandered-slumber returns only your poem on this forum - obviously a rather unique phrase ?!

PostPosted: Thu Sep 22, 2005 6:22 pm
by K
Thanks GD.

I do appreciate feedback. It is a little disconcerting when there are no replies. No idea whether people like it, hate it or even worse are totally indifferent, but I guess that's my own insecurity kicking in.

I guess what I write is hard to penetrate sometimes, I tend to get carried away with phrasing and the like. A large percentage of my poems aren't really about much, contain no message, hence perhaps difficult to connect to.

Thanks again.


PostPosted: Mon Jan 02, 2006 8:20 pm
by John A Silkstone
Hi Kris,

Here is one of my poems about fishing but from
a different point of view. This type of poem is a double Tetracys.
The nornal tetractys is a 20 syllable count, lines 1,2,3 & 4
have that number of syllables and line 5 has 10 syllables.



Spins his web
On air currents
Of blowing wind, fishing for his dinner.
Dinner over, the web is inspected,
Repairs are made.
Once complete,

PostPosted: Sat Jan 07, 2006 2:55 am
by K
I enjoyed that John.

Would lend itself well to haiku/renga/tanka.

But it stands well as it is.

I'd be interested to find out about the poetry group you frequent/run.

Not sure but I think a mutual friend mentioned you, as he knows I dabble in poetry. His name is Dave - surname I have no idea, works at Harbour Place?

Anyhoo if you could send me some info on the poetry group, that would be much appreciated.